IELTS Writing Task 2 · Opinion essay

Bài mẫu IELTS Writing Task 2: Recent figures show an increase

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Đề bài

Recent figures show an increase
in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim
that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social
and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Bài mẫu band 6.0

290 từ. Bài đủ ý, bố cục rõ, từ vựng và ngữ pháp ở mức an toàn: đây là mức nhiều bạn cần để đạt mục tiêu 6.0.

Recent statistics show that violent crime among young people under 18 is increasing. Some psychologists believe that the main reason is that children today do not get enough social and emotional education from their parents and teachers. I partly agree with this opinion.

On the one hand, I agree that a lack of social and emotional learning is an important reason. Nowadays, many parents are very busy with their work, so they do not have enough time to talk to their children, teach them good values or help them deal with their feelings. Some children grow up in difficult families, where parents argue or even use violence. As a result, these children may not learn how to control their anger or solve problems peacefully. In addition, schools usually focus on exams and academic subjects, and they do not teach students much about emotions, respect and how to get along with others.

On the other hand, I think there are also other reasons for youth violence. Firstly, poverty and unemployment can make young people angry and hopeless, and some of them join gangs. Secondly, violent films, video games and social media may influence young people's behaviour. Thirdly, drugs and alcohol can make young people more aggressive. Moreover, peer pressure from friends can push some teenagers to commit crimes.

In my opinion, parents and teachers play a very important role in preventing youth violence, but other social problems should also be solved. Schools should teach social and emotional skills, and the government should help poor families and young people.

In conclusion, I partly agree that a lack of social and emotional learning causes youth violence, but I believe there are also other important reasons, such as poverty, the media and peer pressure.

Bài mẫu band 7.0

307 từ. So với bài 6.0: lập luận sâu hơn, từ vựng chính xác và đa dạng hơn, câu phức dùng tự nhiên hơn.

Recent figures indicate a rise in violent crime among young people under the age of 18, and some psychologists attribute this mainly to a lack of social and emotional learning from parents and teachers. While I agree that this is a significant factor, I believe it is only one of several causes.

There is considerable evidence that social and emotional skills play a key role in preventing violent behaviour. Children learn how to manage their emotions, empathise with others and resolve conflicts largely through their relationships with parents and teachers. In many families today, however, both parents work long hours, and some children receive little guidance or supervision. Children who grow up in homes affected by neglect, family breakdown or domestic violence may come to see aggression as a normal way of dealing with problems. At the same time, schools under pressure to improve exam results often devote little time to teaching students how to handle anger, frustration or disagreements.

Nevertheless, attributing youth violence mainly to a lack of emotional learning oversimplifies the issue. Social and economic factors are also important. Young people living in poverty, in deprived neighbourhoods with few opportunities, are more likely to become involved in gangs and crime. The availability of drugs and alcohol, peer pressure and, some argue, exposure to violent media can also contribute to aggressive behaviour. Furthermore, the influence of social media, where conflicts can escalate quickly, may play a role in some cases.

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