IELTS Writing Task 2 · Opinion essay

Bài mẫu IELTS Writing Task 2: "Prevention is better than cure."

Đồng ý / không đồng ý 40 phút · tối thiểu 250 từ Bài mẫu 6.0 Bài mẫu 7.0 Bài mẫu 9.0 trong app

Đề bài

"Prevention is better than cure."
Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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  1. Mở bàiParaphrase đề + thesis statement nêu rõ mức độ đồng ý.
  2. Thân bài 1Lý do chính thứ nhất ủng hộ quan điểm, có giải thích và ví dụ.
  3. Thân bài 2Lý do thứ hai, hoặc nhượng bộ quan điểm ngược lại rồi phản biện.
  4. Kết bàiNhắc lại quan điểm bằng cách diễn đạt khác, không thêm ý mới.
  • Đừng viết "partly agree" nếu không giải thích được ranh giới.
  • Mỗi đoạn một ý chính, có câu chủ đề rõ.
  • Ví dụ cụ thể giúp tăng điểm Task Response.

Bài mẫu band 6.0

303 từ. Bài đủ ý, bố cục rõ, từ vựng và ngữ pháp ở mức an toàn: đây là mức nhiều bạn cần để đạt mục tiêu 6.0.

There is a famous saying: "Prevention is better than cure." Some people believe that a large part of a country's health budget should be moved from treating illnesses to health education and prevention. I partly agree with this opinion.

On the one hand, spending more money on prevention has many advantages. Firstly, preventing diseases is usually much cheaper than treating them. For example, a vaccine costs much less than treating a person who has a serious disease such as measles or hepatitis. Similarly, teaching people to eat healthily and do exercise can prevent heart disease and diabetes, which are very expensive to treat. Secondly, prevention helps people to live longer and healthier lives. Many diseases, such as lung cancer, are caused by unhealthy habits like smoking. If people learn about the dangers of smoking, fewer people will get sick. Thirdly, if fewer people get sick, hospitals will be less crowded, and doctors can spend more time with patients who really need treatment.

On the other hand, I do not think that a large part of the budget should be taken away from treatment. Many people are already sick and need medical care, such as people with cancer, people who have had accidents and old people with chronic diseases. They cannot wait for the results of health education, which may take many years. If the government reduces spending on treatment, these patients may suffer or even die. In addition, some diseases cannot be prevented, because they are caused by genes or old age.

In my opinion, the government should increase spending on prevention, but it should not reduce the money for treatment too much. A balance between the two is necessary.

In conclusion, I partly agree that more money should be spent on prevention and health education, but treatment must still receive enough funding.

Bài mẫu band 7.0

329 từ. So với bài 6.0: lập luận sâu hơn, từ vựng chính xác và đa dạng hơn, câu phức dùng tự nhiên hơn.

The proverb "prevention is better than cure" has led some people to argue that a large proportion of a country's health budget should be shifted from treatment to health education and preventive measures. While I strongly agree that prevention deserves greater investment, I believe that significant cuts to treatment would be unwise; the aim should be a better balance rather than a large diversion of funds.

There are compelling reasons to invest more in prevention. Firstly, it is often far more cost-effective than treatment. Vaccination programmes, for example, cost relatively little but prevent diseases that would otherwise require expensive hospital care. Similarly, campaigns that encourage people to stop smoking, eat healthily and exercise regularly can reduce the incidence of heart disease, type 2 diabetes and certain cancers, which place an enormous financial burden on health systems. Secondly, prevention improves quality of life by helping people avoid illness altogether, rather than simply treating them once they become sick. Thirdly, as populations age and chronic diseases become more common, investing in prevention is essential to ensure that health systems remain sustainable in the long term.

However, diverting a large proportion of funding away from treatment would cause serious problems. At any given time, millions of people require medical care for conditions that cannot be prevented, such as genetic disorders, many cancers, accidents and the diseases of old age. Reducing treatment budgets could lead to longer waiting times, poorer care and avoidable deaths. Furthermore, the benefits of health education often take many years to appear, whereas the needs of sick patients are immediate. It is also worth noting that many effective preventive measures, such as screening programmes, are delivered by the same doctors and hospitals that provide treatment.

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